I think I over-edited because I didn't have the fuller perspective of the entire story. Without the entire chapter, (or book) it's hard to do more than just basic edits. I don't think I was justified in cutting so much since I don't have the full chapter that this leads into. From now on for Edit Me Thursday, I'll remember this!!
I think some of the dialogue I cut was fine. So here's a better edit:
“She’s in pain—how is this possible?” Adaiyas said.
“I cannot explain it, First Elf—“
“Cannot explain it? You’re the midwife; it’s your job to explain it!”
“Has your wife experienced pain like this before?”
“What are you suggesting, Corina?”
“If I did not know better, I’d suggest labour pains—“ (This line [and the one below it] only works if Corina isn't an elf. Because if she is, this topic of labour pains wouldn't be brought up. But if she is human or some other species, then it would justify Adaiyas's response below. But if Corina is an elf, it sounds funny for Adaiya's to tell her that "Elves do not suffer labour pains..." )
“Elves do not suffer labour pains, Midwife.”
, the midwife, wrung her hands together hopelessly as she stared at the slim elf woman on the birthing mat. No longer clutching to the circular delivery chamber’s birthing pole, her hands now The pregnant elf clutched her swollen belly as she and screamed , a tormented wail pierced the late afternoon air.
Okay! Now I feel better :)
I couldn't live with my conscious if I didn't amend my over-edit. I can go on in peace now for the rest of the week :)